tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post1079040763926643019..comments2023-04-02T16:11:34.370+01:00Comments on Mazzz in Leeds: #FridayFlash: Puma and Jaguar Save the Planetmazzz_in_Leedshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01498100483681096442noreply@blogger.comBlogger29125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-29640137872499901422009-10-12T12:17:49.875+01:002009-10-12T12:17:49.875+01:00I was drawn immediately into this engrossing story...I was drawn immediately into this engrossing story! It was almost, dare I say it, like I was viewing an alter-ego or something. So much fun. Thank you for writing this.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-90117779913165449832009-10-09T05:21:10.669+01:002009-10-09T05:21:10.669+01:00That was delightful, M - and I totally thought tha...That was delightful, M - and I totally thought that they were girls, as soon as I realized they were children. (probably because when I was a girl, I was panther and my sister was snow leopard) I'm with D - save the tree! leave that bit in, because it worked, at least for me! Nice work!Kaite (@TheBusyMystic)http://bit.ly/29oZh0noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-28340317052742332312009-10-08T17:47:21.076+01:002009-10-08T17:47:21.076+01:00Excellent! I thought for sure this was a full-blow...Excellent! I thought for sure this was a full-blown sci-fi adventure right to the very end. Well done!Eric J. Krausehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05774468607814244185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-32422311663800659612009-10-05T17:59:57.463+01:002009-10-05T17:59:57.463+01:00*commenter doing sci-fi happy dance*
Capital L-O-V...*commenter doing sci-fi happy dance*<br />Capital L-O-V-E-D, loved this piece. Great detail, pacing, and the fart joke was a subtle but not disengaging hint that this might involve child's play.<br /><br />The tree works just fine as a jump-cut and re-orientation to the reality portion of the story.<br /><br />You've made me a little jealous that weren't any imaginative sci-fi girls around when I was a geeky young lad...trevhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10930957143736509429noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-64536084299890216762009-10-04T20:34:57.695+01:002009-10-04T20:34:57.695+01:00Reminds me of being a child myself. I still am in ...Reminds me of being a child myself. I still am in many aspects of the mind. Thank you for such a charming tale.Carrie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05093923008179106837noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-23480867494448497192009-10-04T14:27:24.443+01:002009-10-04T14:27:24.443+01:00Perfect, just perfect.Perfect, just perfect.https://www.blogger.com/profile/09492062472206579391noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-20433711772729141482009-10-04T14:21:49.584+01:002009-10-04T14:21:49.584+01:00Charming.
I noticed no mention of gender of the ...Charming. <br /><br />I noticed no mention of gender of the two agents until their (alternate) names were called towards the end of the story. Nicely done.<br /><br />I want more adventures!KjMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17691028465137798738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-16867526492492005012009-10-03T22:50:13.579+01:002009-10-03T22:50:13.579+01:00Great way to pull this back to true humanity -- it...Great way to pull this back to true humanity -- it's universal for kids to play fantasy games like this. Nicely done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-972295063463083102009-10-03T18:46:40.285+01:002009-10-03T18:46:40.285+01:00Fantastic game AND a fart joke! What could be more...Fantastic game AND a fart joke! What could be more fun?~Timhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06774944172261988587noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-64451214917463925502009-10-03T17:11:58.340+01:002009-10-03T17:11:58.340+01:00I really liked it! It was a nice reminder of chil...I really liked it! It was a nice reminder of childhood games.<br /><br />Hmm...I had guessed that Jaguar was a boy and Puma was a girl.Danahttp://pixelenvy.ca/cgi/fff.cginoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-48727602802128723122009-10-03T15:28:14.729+01:002009-10-03T15:28:14.729+01:00Awesome flash. I loved the 'deeper shade of gr...Awesome flash. I loved the 'deeper shade of green' - so clever! I thought they were girls too! Totally over the top and fabulous. I enjoyed the fart humour too :)Lily Mulhollandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09804113718224654006noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-30461540280041960962009-10-03T15:18:43.387+01:002009-10-03T15:18:43.387+01:00clap clap clap!!!! You've got one heck of an i...clap clap clap!!!! You've got one heck of an imagination to be able to bring back the feeling of childhood like this. I think it will take the mind of a child to save this planet :-) Thanks for the happy moment, great story.shannon espositohttp://murderinparadise.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-68703000861951700812009-10-03T14:12:56.111+01:002009-10-03T14:12:56.111+01:00Great story here, Maria. I enjoyed it quite a bit....Great story here, Maria. I enjoyed it quite a bit. I was beginning to question the apparent ease these two special agents had in taking the battleship and then viola, all was explained! It was great. And I finally got to meet the Galatic Overlord!<br />~jonJ. M. Strotherhttp://www.jmstrother.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-5209622699514305642009-10-03T13:07:22.519+01:002009-10-03T13:07:22.519+01:00now that was FUN! I used to do the same thing with...now that was FUN! I used to do the same thing with my friends as a kid, i love it! Though we were always exploring the mysterious Planet X *lol* Great job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-88531771020707445592009-10-03T13:00:26.024+01:002009-10-03T13:00:26.024+01:00I wrote a piece once attempting to complete it wit...I wrote a piece once attempting to complete it without indicating gender -- it was so difficult! Kudos to you for pulling it off so seamlessly.<br /><br /><br />Excellent piece, flawlessly executed. I'm still smiling :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05660181882760446931noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-61566212802480999382009-10-03T13:00:16.271+01:002009-10-03T13:00:16.271+01:00Cute, most assuredly. Reminds me when I was younge...Cute, most assuredly. Reminds me when I was younger. I'd go into detail, but then you'd seriously question my sanity. And my sanity is already questionable enough as is!<br /><br />I do have one small, teeny, tiny little criticism. The overall story handles everything perfectly well, with the exception of the first line. If I tell you that I had a character that was "God of All Evil and Chaos, Lord of the Demonic Legions of Hell, and Bringer of Death to the Living," on the first line, well... It loses something.E. D. Johnsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14396748118291198370noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-26346490069335529912009-10-03T12:13:48.678+01:002009-10-03T12:13:48.678+01:00Loved the playfulness of this, showcasing the powe...Loved the playfulness of this, showcasing the power of imagination. <br /><br />The interjection of the disgruntled tree towards the end was a lovely flourish that epahsizes the feel and theme of this. It totally should be there, Mazz. Take it out and you will have a disgruntled reader on your hands.<br /><br />Top stuff.dan powellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14131553102349479513noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-15786942429301304412009-10-03T11:35:38.371+01:002009-10-03T11:35:38.371+01:00Thanks everyone :)
Chris - the tree was very much ...Thanks everyone :)<br />Chris - the tree was very much an indulgence and probably shouldn't be in there, but I'm glad someone liked it!mazzz_in_Leedshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01498100483681096442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-72082625802540345372009-10-02T21:59:00.867+01:002009-10-02T21:59:00.867+01:00Thanks for bringing a smile to my face. I like ev...Thanks for bringing a smile to my face. I like everything about this story. It reminds me of my girls playing. Loved the tree's thoughts too.<br />~chrisChris Chartrandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09766438158698041660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-69457247057762387612009-10-02T18:46:06.537+01:002009-10-02T18:46:06.537+01:00The Galactic Overlord strikes again! This was grea...The Galactic Overlord strikes again! This was great - loved how reality swallowed the imaginary.Laura Enohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09982794146667832204noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-52389098120486667172009-10-02T18:35:31.822+01:002009-10-02T18:35:31.822+01:00Great interrupt! The fully manufactured world was ...Great interrupt! The fully manufactured world was great.Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-44942494239112627342009-10-02T17:13:18.338+01:002009-10-02T17:13:18.338+01:00Sweet and surpising. Very well done. The line '...Sweet and surpising. Very well done. The line 'engulfed by sunshine and lawn' is beautful and the final line brought a smile to my face... also having the protagonists as little girls was a very nice touch.Clive Martynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15057496284523957955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-49200110318055710792009-10-02T16:26:26.222+01:002009-10-02T16:26:26.222+01:00I totally pictured them as girls. Probably because...I totally pictured them as girls. Probably because just about any story that started in our house with the words "galactic overlord" was then painstakingly rendered in chalk in the driveway and only interrupted for snacks or bathroom breaks.... [or rain] but then we took it inside and made spaceships out of the furniture instead. Grinned all the way through.<br />Thanks!<br />Karen :0)Karen from Mentorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03685540761526680384noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-76226824179949976282009-10-02T15:55:50.854+01:002009-10-02T15:55:50.854+01:00first off, i love the names in this piece especial...first off, i love the names in this piece especially the interplanetary ones. great pacing and such a fun and spot on payoff. you've captured the playfulness of youth. great write, mazzzMichael Solenderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01120045114297450520noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3870850419068808621.post-90762889311302933482009-10-02T15:43:16.125+01:002009-10-02T15:43:16.125+01:00Loved this voyage into very vivid imagination. Th...Loved this voyage into very vivid imagination. The return to reality was excellent. :)Lauritahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03688820247531607677noreply@blogger.com